Your poem has a sculptural quality due it its insistent use of white space. Is white space an adhesive? A source of torque?
Love the idea of torque. White space is a place for thought and
breath. To quote Leonard Cohen out of context, “It’s how the light gets
We read the end of this poem as offering
hope that “a horizon you’d dreamt alone” can be approached “together”
now – a kind of intimacy. Is this a love poem?
It’s a poem that hopes love still will allow for the soul to follow its
necessary trajectory. It’s an early love poem; it still has its